február 01, 2008

Writing exercise - Grandma's French Toast

Chris, the former Church Lady is running a writing exercise HERE.
This one below is my entry:
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Grandma's French Toast

I heard Mom coming home from the visit. She kept her voice low so as not to disturb me - but I was awake.
She greeted me with a warm hug:Honey, are you feeling better now?
Mom, not really. I cough all the time.
Oh, poor dear. See, what Grandma has packed just for you?
I jumped with delight, and shouted out in anticipation the name of my favourite food. She made it so great. The trouble was that I felt full.
Mom, is it okay to save it for dinner? I can't eat it right now.
All right dear. Just get back to rest, please.
I wanted to get hungry so I waited some and fell asleep. By dinner I got worse and was hardly able to shove down anything. I slept a lot, well into the following day.
It was nearly lunch time when I recalled having placed the package on the radiator. I put it there to keep the warmth, to keep it fine.
Now I unpacked the foil.
I expected the exciting smell, the crunchiness. Saliva started to gather in my mouth. There you go...
Or would you rather not?
What I revealed was a multi-coloured, slightly deformed damp flat object. It was pleasingly warm all right, but the surface was all hairy with tiny strings of mould gorwing in blots of various sizes and forms.
A patchwork of disgust.
I re-wrapped it and tried to hide the result of my stupidity into the garbage bin.
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At the same time, I am busy.
It's either chopping firewood, or doing some gladiator fitness, mwah-hah-hah, or translating, or, when I feel inspired, guess what, I write.
Following upon Vesper's experiences about brushing away blue feelings I have returned to writing the long version of Halo.
Halo was the name of my first-ever contest entry and I had some struggle to put it within the limits of 250 words. Some people suggested that the story deserves to be expanded, and that is exactly what I have been doing since mid November 2007.
My other blog deals with some details about the progress.
Right now I'm at about 3300 words.

10 megjegyzés:

Sarah Jane írta...

I cant believe theres a Hungarian blog just like mine! hahaha. If only I could read it. I love it though - wonder if we should join forces somehow.

Great to see you are still going with this.
xoxo

SzélsőFa írta...

Hi, Vickie,

Isn't it amazing? I found this site and immediately thought of you. I hope you and the writer of that site will make friends soon. I suggest you speaking English to her/him. Most young people speak English in Hungary.

Russell Ragsdale írta...

I make French Toast usually about twice a month. It was hiding in a rather interesting piece of a story this time, not coming steaming hot from my skillet. Thanks for cooking me this most interesting serving.

Névtelen írta...

I like how the dialog feels like a fond memory.

Sorry her treat was ruined.

SzélsőFa írta...

Russel,

I'm glad you liked the unexpected fate ot the toast! Thank you for dropping by again!

Jason,

It is autobiographical, you see :)

Vesper írta...

Good writing exercise!
"I wanted to get hungry so I waited some and fell asleep." I like this! :-)
I'm very happy you're writing again. Keep going! :-)

SzélsőFa írta...

Thank you, Vesper.
It was just for fun, though.
But why not?

Beth írta...

Have fun chopping that wood. It certainly is a workout.

Chris Eldin írta...

I should've been over sooner to say thank you for doing the writing exercise.
I like the diversity in your writing!!
:-)
This was a good one.

SzélsőFa írta...

Beth,

yes, it makes my hands even stronger :)
but woul dmake me a very bad violinist... Fortunately I'm not one :)

Chris,

That's ok.
I'm glad you liked it.